Out of the Storm

Community Corner => Creative Expressions => Poetry & Creative Writing => Topic started by: Deep Blue on November 21, 2018, 10:12:39 PM

Title: Drowning
Post by: Deep Blue on November 21, 2018, 10:12:39 PM
Drowning
I stand on the shore and watch him bobbing in the water. 
His head goes under waves but he comes back up for air.
He flails his arms and yells for attention.
"I'm drowning", he yells.
I throw him a rope
He does not reach for it...

I should jump in and save him!
If I go to his rescue, it's certain he will pull me under
I look him in the eyes and throw the rope again
My eyes urge him to try to help himself
He stares back cold, angry.

I sit on the shore and put down the rope
There I sit watching...
Watching him drown.
Title: Re: Drowning
Post by: saturnine on November 21, 2018, 10:25:35 PM
Wow, that got me thinking about some of the relationships in my life. I like how concise it is - you said so much using so few words. Thanks for sharing!
Title: Re: Drowning
Post by: sanmagic7 on November 22, 2018, 02:32:10 PM
brilliant.

i echo saternine - your words were concise, efficient, and impactful.  i've had to watch people drown, too.  it's awful, horrible, but you're absolutely right - they can too easily pull us under.  thank you for this.  love and hugs, db.
Title: Re: Drowning
Post by: Deep Blue on November 22, 2018, 05:10:51 PM
Thanks saturnine,
This is happening with me right now and I wrote this as a reminder to myself to steer clear of his problems.

San,
It was in my response to you that I realized I had to get this out of me.  Thanks for pushing me in my healing friend  :hug: I cherish you